5h - essay writing final review

• Engels
• Middelbare school
• havo
• Leerjaar 5

Essay Writing

final tips and trick

Mock 2

* lots of you did not hand in a finished product

* intro - link between opening sentence and preview not always clear

* linking words / commas

* pro/con in middle paragraphs:

- Firstly there is a difference in convenience. => then explain using pro/con arguments

- Next the atmosphere in a full concert hall is electric. It has a special feeling but the hall can also be very crowded =>then proceed to explain why at home this would be better

- Finally, one needs to consider the cost. => again pros and cons of at home or live

* Conclusion - make sure that you properly explain why you would choose one over the other and do not leave it hanging

nowadays there is the option to watch concerts online.

The convenience, atmosphere and price are very different between attending the concert of just watching it online from home.

There are loads of artists who produce music in all genres. Most of them have concerts you can visit. Nowadays people can even watch a concert at home but is it better to go to a real life concert or watch the same concert on your couch at home?

You have to write ... paragraphs in your essay

1. 3
2. 4
3. 5
4. 6

Which of these are you not allowed to use in the middle paragraphs?

1. You
2. We
3. They
4. I

It is allowed to use
"I"
in the ...

1. introduction
2. body paragraphs
3. conclusion
4. all paragraphs

Which of these is NOT allowed in your essay?

1. passive sentences
2. contractions
3. formal language
4. linking words

Your body paragraph should start with ...

1. a linking word
2. a linking word + a topic sentence
3. a topic sentence
4. an example

Your body paragraph should contain ...

1. only pro arguments
2. only con arguments
3. only examples
4. pro and con arguments

Body paragraphs

* Please look at the following topic sentences 

of body paragraphs

* each time decide whether it is good or not so good and be able to tell me why

Firstly, there is a discussion point about the atmosphere.

1. good
2. not so good

To begin with, convenience plays a vital role in whether or not someone would attend a concert.

1. good
2. not so good

Attending a concert is an unexplainable feeling.

1. good
2. not so good

Lastly, the aspect of money.

1. good
2. not so good

Finally, saving money plays an important role in both situations.

1. good
2. not so good

Second of all, some people do not like big crowds and it makes them feel uncomfortable.

1. good
2. not so good

Another big difference between going to a live concert and watching it at home is the cost.

1. good
2. not so good

However, a real life concert also has its benefits.

1. good
2. not so good

The conclusion

• includes your opinion on the topic
• explains why you think so
• ideally finishes off with a bang!

In conclusion, going to the concert in person has its benefits and so does listening and watching from home. I think that going in person is better, since you get the full experience

1. good
2. not so good

In conclusion, I think going to a live concert is the best way to enjoy the experience. It might come with its shortcomings but the atmosphere is so special you would not want to be missing out or be sitting on the sofa at home.

1. good
2. not so good

In conclusion, staying at home save you a lot of nuisances but I think they are worth the surreal experience you get while attending a concert. Nothing beats it and those who choose to stay at home do not know what they are missing.
Rock 'n Roll!!

1. good
2. not so good