3V Essay 2

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3V Essay writing II

Today:

• Recap
• Discuss outlines
•  Look at sample essay fragments
•  Assessment criteria

Recap: PEAL paragraph structure

• Point
• Evidence
• Analysis
• Link

RECAP: PEAL
Explain what the POINT is

RECAP: PEAL
Explain what the EVIDENCE is

RECAP: PEAL
Explain what the ANALYSIS is

RECAP: PEAL
Explain what the LINK is

RECAP: Introduction
What do you write/do in an introduction?

RECAP: Conclusion
What do you do or don't write or do in a concluding paragraph?

Analyse the example and give your opinion:

 "But what killed Henry? That's what's written in the three upcoming paragraphs: his diseases, his injuries, his sexual health and his eating habits."

Analysis

Never say what you are going to do - just do it. So for example: "Contributing to Henry's death were the following factors: disease, sports injuries, his sexual health and poor eating habits."

Analyse the example and give your opinion:

"When Henry was five years into his reign, he got a fever"

Analysis

Avoid the use of the verbs 'get' and 'got' as the translation from Dutch to English might be confusing. Write "he had a fever" or "he suffered from a fever" instead.

Analyse the example and give your opinion:

 "Nowadays, people use vaccinations to prevent ourselves from getting it, but in Henry's time, there's no escape. Even so,he survives the smallpox."

Analysis

All of the events in your essay happened in the past, therefore your whole essay should be written in the past tense.

Analyse the example and give your opinion:

"So, what exactly killed King Henry VIII? Well, the questions from the beginning are answered. "

Analysis

Very informal, better would be something like: "When referring back to the questions in the beginning, one could conclude that....."

Discuss outlines

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Assessment criterion 1: Content

• Does NOT begin with “I’m going to talk about” or “this essay will discuss” 
• Has an understanding of the different factors leading up to & causing Henry VIII’s death 
• Has understanding of historical context; what were the consequences of Henry’s choices and lifestyle 

Assessment criterion 2: Language

• Formal; academic register 
• No use of personal pronouns with reference to author or reader 
• Appropriate, effective vocabulary used 
• Spelling, grammar and syntax are appropriate to task 

Assessment criterion 3: Structure

• Title, introductory paragraph & at least three body paragraphs. 
• Clear paragraph structure –  (PEAL) 
• One clear idea per paragraph 
• Quotations are effectively used
• Transitional words/ideas used
• Conclusion gives readers something to think about
• Conclusion presents a judgment 
• Essay question is answered 

TIPS

• No contractions (can’t →cannot / don’t → do not).​
• Use the right tense (Past Simple would be the most logical)
• Use lots of linking words and phrases
• Don't use 'I', 'you', 'your' or 'my' (pers. pronouns referring to author/reader)
• Turn on your spell check in Word!
• Never start a sentence with: but/and/or.​
• When quoting use quotation marks “…quote…” 
• Point (=topic sentence) is never a question and never starts with ‘yes/no’.​

Questions?

•  Next week at school: group B and C on Thursday 4 and Friday 5 June
  Bring your essays! Either on a laptop or printed so you can check each other's work.
• Finish draft of essay (introduction / 2-3 body paragraphs / conclusion)