Writing part 5 + feedback

• Engels
• Middelbare school
• vwo
• Leerjaar 2

Nathan	Guus	Daan	Angelica	Brechtje	Emma
		Amber	Kim	Florien	Fleur
Lian	Teddy	Chloë	Anne- Quirien	Nino	Fender
Fadi	Kasper	Iris	Isolde		Hakan

Teacher

2C seating chart

Read for 10 minutes will be skipped

The plan 

• Finish up your writing 
• Read each other's pieces and give feedback
• Work on your speech
• Work on your history/English assignment
• Do English Council assignment   

Speaking contest

• Think for 2 minutes and present your pros and cons list 
• Respond to the list , trying to persuade your classmate! 

What to do?

• 10 minutes to finish your writing up
• Make a group of 3-4 students and grade each other's stories in rounds  

Nathan	Guus	Daan	Angelica	Brechtje	Emma
		Amber	Kim	Florien	Fleur
Lian	Teddy	Chloë	Anne- Quirien	Nino	Fender
Fadi	Kasper	Iris	Isolde		Hakan

Teacher

2C seating chart

10 minutes reading 

Coming soon!

• Next lesson writing test "story"
• 17.02 speeches must be done !
• 22.02 School speaking contest  

History assignment is due to be handed in today aslo for a grade for English (via Teams)

Today

• Kahoot.it on synonyms
• Peer feedback your stories  
• Kahoot.it on past tenses 

create.kahoot.it

Round 1 content 

• The content is relevant to the task
• The story carries on from the promt
• Surprise aspect is included  
• The ending is impressive / unexpected

Round 2 communicative achievement 

• The conventions of a story, such as chronological development, narrative verb forms, and varying sentence length for dramatic effect, are used to hold the target reader’s attention.   
•  Straightforward and complex ideas are communicated (examples)

Round 3 organisation

• The text is generally well organised and coherent, using a variety of linking words and cohesive devices (examples)
• Easy to understand because the ideas and sentences are well connected.

Round 4 language 

• Uses a range of vocabulary, including less common lexis appropriately 
• Uses a range of simple and complex grammatical forms with control and flexibility. Flexibility means the writer can adapt their choice of words and style, rather than using the same form over and over
• Errors

Round 5

Pick the best story and read it aloud to us 

create.kahoot.it

learnenglishteens.britishcouncil.org

Quick Collocation Quiz

 Which one word can be used to complete all of the following three sentences? 

1. The message was written in ........ and was impossible to read.

2. The club has a very strict dress ........ and you will not be allowed in unless you're dressed in a suit and tie.

3. Could you tell me what the area ........ is for London, please?

CODE

The missing word is 'CODE'. Write your own definition or example sentence to help you remember these collocations:

to be written in code

dress code

(telephone) area code

FCE: Writing Task - Part 1

Writing Paper Part 1. Task Type: Essay

Question

In your English class you have been talking about the effect of fast food on our diet. Now your teacher has asked you to write an essay.

Write an essay for your teacher (around 140-190 words).

What you need to do to pass

 What is the examiner looking for in a good answer?

Ideas for writing

Ask yourself the following questions to help you get started:

What is a typical daily diet for young people?

Why might some young people be eating excessive amounts of fast food?

In general, do young people worry about the consequences of a poor diet?

What role can parents or teachers play in helping young people adopt a healthy diet?

Do governments need to regulate the fast-food industry?

The plan

The introduction

• State the topic clearly, give a brief outline of the topic, saying why it is important
• DO NOT  express your opinion in the introduction

Body Paragraphs 1,2,3 (content points)

• Start with a topic sentence which states the main idea of each paragraph.
• Include relevant details to support the main idea.
• DO NOT include your opinion in this part of the essay.

Conclusion

• Try to connect the conclusion to what you said in the introduction (essay topic)
• DO NOT introduce any new ideas in the conclusion
• Sumarise what you have said in the essay
• REMEMBER TO SAY WHETHER YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.
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Drafting and proofreading your work

You should look at your first draft of the task and decide:

• Have you responded to the statement and the notes appropriately?
• Is the essay organised in a clear and logical way?
• Is the language accurate with a good range of structures?
• Is the style OK?
• Will it have a positive effect on the reader?

If the answer is 'no' to any of these questions then you will need to do some more drafting!

 

LINKING WORDS AND PHRASES

To express personal opinions

In my opinion .....

I feel .....

It seems to me .....

I believe that ....

I think ......

To list ideas

Firstly, 

Secondly, 

Finally, / Lastly,  (Thirdly)

In the first place,

Lastly, 

To show a sequence

First of all,

Then,

After that, 

Eventually,

In the end,

Conclusion

All in all,

To sum up,

To conclude,

In short,

In conclusion

Now you try: 

In class, make a plan and tomorrow we will write the essay in the Writing Task on slides 2 and 3

USEFUL TIPS

Brainstorm in groups

Share your tips

Mrs T's  Tip: make a plan!

Choose one of the following tasks

1. 10 reasons why school was a good idea (slide 13) Read the text and think of the answers to the discussion questions

2. scroll to the bottom of the BBC newsclip (slide 14)- Read the article: She was labelled as naughty!  Make a summary  of the most important points

www.bbc.com

Do you still need help?

Use the LessonUp's we have looked at. 

There is a link to a good website on slide 19

www.rubenvalero.com