Essay writing lesson 3

• Engels
• Middelbare school
• vwo
• Leerjaar 3,4

On Writing an argumentative essay (focus on conclusions) and making you feel the PEEL

Welcome

1. Thesis Statement & PEEL Recap

2. Writing conclusions

3. A bit of listening (test prep)

Which is the best thesis statement:

Ryan Gosling is attractive because he...

1. has a stunning smile, a manly voice and a Herculean set of abs.
2. has stunning smile, a manly voice, a Herculean set of abs and dreamy eyes.
3. has a stunning smile and a Herculean set of abs.
4. I'm not that into Ryan Gosling.

What does PEEL stand for?

1. Point, elaboration, excess, link
2. Point, evidence, explanation, link
3. Position, example, evidence, link
4. Position, elaboration, explanation, link

Magic Formula for writing a Thesis Statement

Identify: Point/Examples/Explanation/Link

First of all, smart phones allow for interactive teaching and learning, both in online and real-life classrooms. Virtual classroom tools, such as LessonUp and Socrative, which are easily accessible on students' phones, offer students instant feedback. Furthermore, they can be used in and outside of the classroom. As such, platforms like this create a more engaging lesson for students as they do not only have to listen to their teachers and take notes, but can be engaged in the lesson as well. Smartphones, in this way, add to the learning proces and do not hamper, but promote learning.

Check the bodyparagraph on the next page

1. Identify the POINT  (write down first & last word)
2. Identify the Examples (write down first & last word)
3. Identify the Explanation (write down first & last word)
4. Identify the Link (write down first & last word)

On the next page you get the opportunity to take a picture and upload your image in LessonUp 

First of all, smart phones allow for interactive teaching and learning, both in online and real-life classrooms. Virtual classroom tools, such as LessonUp and Socrative, which are easily accessible on students' phones, offer students instant feedback. Furthermore, they can be used in and outside of the classroom. As such, platforms like this create a more engaging lesson for students as they do not only have to listen to their teachers and take notes, but can be engaged in the lesson as well. Smartphones, in this way, add to the learning proces and do not hamper, but promote learning.

Point/Examples/Explanation/Link

Point: First of all, smart phones allow for interactive teaching and learning, both in online and real-life classrooms. Evidence: Virtual classroom tools, such as LessonUp and Socrative, which are easily accessible on students' phones, offer students instant feedback. Furthermore, they can be used in and outside of the classroom. Explanation: As such, platforms like this create a more engaging lesson for students as they do not only have to listen to their teachers and take notes, but can be engaged in the lesson as well. Link: Smartphones, in this way, add to the learning proces and do not hamper, but promote learning.

Writing conclusions

The conclusion is the last paragraph in the persuasive essay. A good conclusion will not only restate the main points of the argument, it will bringing something new to the table and end with strength and resolution. It’s been compellingly argued that readers or listeners best remember the first and last things stated. With this notion in mind, you should allot yourself an appropriate amount of time to craft a resonant introduction and conclusion. One way to write a strong concluding paragraph is to restate the thesis and main points of the essay, but then attempt to leave a strong impression on the reader by ending on a clinching statement.

Writing conclusions

The conclusion is the last paragraph in the persuasive essay. A good conclusion will not only restate the main points of the argument, it will bringing something new to the table and end with strength and resolution. It’s been compellingly argued that readers or listeners best remember the first and last things stated. With this notion in mind, you should allot yourself an appropriate amount of time to craft a resonant introduction and conclusion. One way to write a strong concluding paragraph is to restate the thesis and main points of the essay, but then attempt to leave a strong impression on the reader by ending on a clinching statement.

Better world

Worst case scenario

Call to action

If you understand how important it is for students to have the right to dress themselves, it is your civic duty to attend your local school counsel meeting and demand that this proposal be rejected.

If students aren’t forced to wear uniforms, our school will have a much more pleasant and productive environment in which everyone will learn and grow.

If students are required to wear uniforms, the environment of our school will become drab and colorless, and the structure of our hallowed institution will be further from a college and closer to a prison.

Look at conclusion A & B. Which is the best one? Why? Indicate which points are missing for each conclusion (if any) > next slide. 

A. In conclusion I think parents should not let children under age get on Facebook because many different things can happen.

B. In conclusion I think students should have lockers. If we have lockers stealing in school would go down, it would create a safe and clean place for students to put their things, and students would complain less and be healthier. If we had lockers, the school would be a happier place for everyone. If you don’t want your things stolen, contact your principal and demand lockers for your school.

Improve conclusion A (next slide)

In conclusion I think parents should not let children under age get on Facebook because many different things can happen.

Thesis statement: I think parents should not let children underage be on Facebook, because it they might become involved with the wrong people, they might become addicted or they might be exposed to content in appropriate for their age. 

Hand in your revised conclusion A

From the next lesson onwards you will start writing your own essay for which you will have to conduct some research. The topic should relate to your profile (continuous learning pathway higher education). The assignment will be provided the next lesson.

Homework 

Think about a topic for your essay.