Swap your paper with a peer who will complete the next steps.
1. Where does the writer need to add sensory details to describe sights, sounds, smells, tastes, or touches? Underline any parts of the two sentence horror story above where the writer could add sensory details.
2. What verbs did the writer use? Circle the verbs in the two sentence horror story above and then list them below with suggestions for stronger verbs that could be used instead. For example, looked could be replaced with stared. Use a thesaurus to help you.
3. What nouns did the writer use? Box the nouns in the two sentence horror story above and then list any below that you think could be more specific. For example, car could be replaced with a specific make and model like a ‘68 Mustang Convertible? List them below.
4. Any other comments or suggestions?