Writing a formal E-mail

• Engels
• MBO
• Studiejaar 3

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Writing a formal e-mail

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Today's goal:

How to write 

a successful formal E-mail

Situation

The website Teen Ink regularly asks teenagers to send in photos so they can publish them. 

Peter, Jason, and Ellen are enthusiastic photographers and want to submit some. However, they still have a few questions and each sends an email about it.

Let's take a look at these three E-mails

There is one which I consider bad, one is okay and one is good. 1. Which one is the worst? Why?

2. Which one is the best? And why?

3. Formulate success criteria. 

Take notes during watching!

Email one: Ellen

Hello my name is Ellen. I live in the Netherlands.

I was surfing on the internet and I saw your website Teen ink,

I love taking pictures because its my passion. 

When I take pictures its mostly portrets or family vacation photos

To share my photos I've made an instagram page where I share all the photos I make, I get so many lovely reactions.

I want to share my pictures to Teen Ink, but I wanna now how many pictures I am allowed to send.

If you use my pictures will you please send me a notification?

With dear regards, Ellen

Subject: questions website Teen ink

Dear Sir/Madam,

First of all I would like to introduce myself. My name is Peter. I am a fifteen year old boy and I live in the Netherlands. I found your website while I was surfing on the internet.

I love photography, it is my hobby. I take portrait photos and holiday pictures that I am very satisfied with. I have an Instagram account where I share my best photos with others. I always get a lot of positive comments to my pictures.

I do have some questions: how many pictures can I send in? Additionally, could you please notify me if you plan to post my picture on your website?

Thank you very much for your attention. I hope to hear from you soon.

Kind regards, Peter Potter

Email two: Peter

 Dear Website teen ink

hello my name is jason I am a 14 year old boy form the netherlands and i was looking on the internet and found your webstide. i looked on to your website and when i heard that it was about taking pictures, i wanted to now more about it. Making pictures is my hobbey, i have my own instagram page with foto's that i make. i make like pictures of my vacation and i like to make foto's of animals, I get really much like's and coment from fans. how many foto's can I send and would you like to keep me up to date if i poste the foto's, i would like that. 

Greetings, Jason

                             Email three: Jason

Which E-mail, do you think, is the worst? Why?

Which E-mail is the best? Why?

Subject: questions website Teen ink

Dear Sir/Madam,

First of all I would like to introduce myself. My name is Peter. I am a fifteen-year-old boy and I live in the Netherlands. I found your website while I was surfing on the internet.

I love photography, it is my hobby. I take portrait photos and holiday pictures that I am very satisfied with. I have an Instagram account where I share my best photos with others. I always get a lot of positive comments to my pictures.

I do have some questions: how many pictures can I send? Additionally, could you please notify me if you plan to post my picture on your website?

Thank you very much for your attention. I hope to hear from you soon.

Kind regards, Peter Potter

Best email two: Peter

Succescriteria, waar moet een formele E-mail aan voldoen?

(bij het maken van IVIO schrijfopdrachten )

, juiste spelling en grammatica

Hoofdletters: dagen, maanden, feestdagen, landen, namen personen.  https://www.taaldok.nl/engels/hoofdletters

Maak je zinnen niet te lang door er telkens "and" tussen te zetten: maximaal 1x "and" in één zin!

photo's = photos

Grammatica: bij meervoud geen apostrof (hoge komma)  

Juiste spelling, grammatica en

With his boat -> Dit is geen volledige zin.

/Kind regards,

(voor- én achternaam)

Tip!

Kijk ook nog even goed naar de tips en opmerkingen die ik gegeven heb bij jullie gemaakte "write a review of your favourite TV presenter".

Dit was de schrijfopdracht in hoofdstuktoets 2.