Writing part 5 + feedback

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Teacher

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The plan 

• Write a story 
• Read each other's pieces and give feedback
• Do English Council assignment  *
• Kahoot.it on past tenses 
• Kahoot.it on synonyms 

Coming soon!

• Next lesson writing test "story"

Layout: Use paragraphs

Title

Who, what, where, when

Story

Ending

Always, always make a plan.....

Leave a blank line between each of your paragraphs

Keep to the word count of 140-190 words

A good story should include the following: 

A good story should include the following: 

• a paragraph that is interesting so that  you want to read on.
• sentences that are varied in length for interest.
• short sentences for dramatic events
• a wide range of vocabulary, including vivid adjectives and adverbs.
• a wide range of past tenses.
• correct use of paragraphs
• a range of connectors 

What are Cambridge looking for?

The Cambridge First for Schools Trainer give a checklist to follow after you have finished writing your story. It asks you if you have:

used a range of past tenses?

used descriptive adjectives and adverbs?

used a range to time words and expressions?

divided your story into paragraphs?

written 140-190 words?

Peer feedback 

Answer all points in the text:

• First sentence has to be: Tom got off the train and as the train left, he realized he was holding the wrong suitcase.. 
• Story must contain a suprise and an address

Your story is being written for a magazine for young people so the tone should be informal and friendly.

• Write between 150 and 190 words 

Peer feedback 

Round 1 content 

• The content is relevant to the task
• The story carries on from the promt
• Surprise aspect is included  
• The ending is impressive / unexpected

Round 2 communicative achievement 

• The conventions of a story, such as chronological development, narrative verb forms, and varying sentence length for dramatic effect, are used to hold the target reader’s attention.   
•  Straightforward and complex ideas are communicated (examples)

Round 3 organisation

• The text is generally well organised and coherent, using a variety of linking words and cohesive devices (examples)
• Easy to understand because the ideas and sentences are well connected.

Round 4 language 

• Uses a range of vocabulary, including less common lexis appropriately 
• Uses a range of simple and complex grammatical forms with control and flexibility. Flexibility means the writer can adapt their choice of words and style, rather than using the same form over and over
• Errors

Round 5

Calculate the score ;-)

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Quick Collocation Quiz

 Which one word can be used to complete all of the following three sentences? 

1. The message was written in ........ and was impossible to read.

2. The club has a very strict dress ........ and you will not be allowed in unless you're dressed in a suit and tie.

3. Could you tell me what the area ........ is for London, please?

CODE

The missing word is 'CODE'. Write your own definition or example sentence to help you remember these collocations:

to be written in code

dress code

(telephone) area code

FCE: Writing Task - Part 1

Writing Paper Part 1. Task Type: Essay

Question

In your English class you have been talking about the effect of fast food on our diet. Now your teacher has asked you to write an essay.

Write an essay for your teacher (around 140-190 words).

What you need to do to pass

 What is the examiner looking for in a good answer?

Ideas for writing

Ask yourself the following questions to help you get started:

What is a typical daily diet for young people?

Why might some young people be eating excessive amounts of fast food?

In general, do young people worry about the consequences of a poor diet?

What role can parents or teachers play in helping young people adopt a healthy diet?

Do governments need to regulate the fast-food industry?

The plan

The introduction

• State the topic clearly, give a brief outline of the topic, saying why it is important
• DO NOT  express your opinion in the introduction

Body Paragraphs 1,2,3 (content points)

• Start with a topic sentence which states the main idea of each paragraph.
• Include relevant details to support the main idea.
• DO NOT include your opinion in this part of the essay.

Conclusion

• Try to connect the conclusion to what you said in the introduction (essay topic)
• DO NOT introduce any new ideas in the conclusion
• Sumarise what you have said in the essay
• REMEMBER TO SAY WHETHER YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.
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Drafting and proofreading your work

You should look at your first draft of the task and decide:

• Have you responded to the statement and the notes appropriately?
• Is the essay organised in a clear and logical way?
• Is the language accurate with a good range of structures?
• Is the style OK?
• Will it have a positive effect on the reader?

If the answer is 'no' to any of these questions then you will need to do some more drafting!

 

LINKING WORDS AND PHRASES

To express personal opinions

In my opinion .....

I feel .....

It seems to me .....

I believe that ....

I think ......

To list ideas

Firstly, 

Secondly, 

Finally, / Lastly,  (Thirdly)

In the first place,

Lastly, 

To show a sequence

First of all,

Then,

After that, 

Eventually,

In the end,

Conclusion

All in all,

To sum up,

To conclude,

In short,

In conclusion

Now you try: 

In class, make a plan and tomorrow we will write the essay in the Writing Task on slides 2 and 3

USEFUL TIPS

Brainstorm in groups

Share your tips

Mrs T's  Tip: make a plan!

Choose one of the following tasks

1. 10 reasons why school was a good idea (slide 13) Read the text and think of the answers to the discussion questions

2. scroll to the bottom of the BBC newsclip (slide 14)- Read the article: She was labelled as naughty!  Make a summary  of the most important points

www.bbc.com

Do you still need help?

Use the LessonUp's we have looked at. 

There is a link to a good website on slide 19

www.rubenvalero.com