H5B - P2 - Week 6 - Lesson 3 - Essay Feedback

• Engels
• Middelbare school
• havo
• Leerjaar 5

H5 - P2 - Week 6 - Lesson 3

Learning Goals

You will...

- Learn from your writing mistakes

Essay Feedback

- What do you see? 

- Things that I noticed

- Good examples

- Correct the thesis statements

- Receive feedback on your own essay

- Grading system

Good thesis examples

Therefore, fireworks should be banned for individuals. 

Therefore, the government should not bad fireworks for individuals  during New Year's Eve. 

They have a giant impact on the environment and many people get injured each year, which is why the sales of fireworks should be banned to the general public. 

Correct the thesis statement:
In my opinion, fireworks for particulairs should be banned. Even though many people say it is a tradition, I think the problems are simply too big to ignore anymore.

Correct the thesis statement:
Because of the dangers they represent for people, animals, and the environment, I believe that fireworks should be prohibited.

Correct the thesis statement:
Should firework not be banned.

Learning Goals

You ...

- learned from your writing mistakes

Bye!