Both sentences are too informal and both miss
Note: The position of being a tour guide
The position of tour guide
Opening 1:
tops:
first sentence (a.o. use of passive).
tips:
content: sentence 2 is (nearly) superfluous and makes it too informal
register: avoid contractions (she's)
language:
fond of (rather hopes to)
points for content.
Opening 2:
tops:
straightforward
tips:
content: 'writing about' is too vague. Also mention why you know enough about him to write a reference.
register: too informal: comrade sounds like buddy, mate. Use colleague or friend.