CRITERION C: FOCUS AND ORGANIZATION = 5 points
How well organized, coherent and focused is the presentation of ideas?
3 out of 5
This is a hard one to place - if looking at the band descriptors, it could be argued to get 3 or 4 here. The analysis is certainly "adequately focused" (band 4); however, while it has a clear organisation, the two long paragraphs cover similar ground and it is best described as "adequately organised and generally coherent" (band 3) rather than "well-organised and mostly coherent" (band 4). As such, taking a best-fit approach, 3 out of 5 here.