2425 V5 essay writing (6): common mistakes / correct mistakes essay 1 + WiP 28 (key), WiP 29

• Engels
• Middelbare school
• vwo
• Leerjaar 6

Tue 14 September

• check homework: exc 11, 14, 15, 23 
• speaking: exc 25
• TB 1.2 exc 11, 14, 15, 23

Good to see you, V5!

Mon 2/12 - Fri 6/12

Study objectives:

I can 

• identify and correct mistakes commonly made in essay writing
  
• plan and write an argumentative essay
  
• use exam vocabulary in context

 

This week's work

In class (1): 

• common mistakes in essay writing 
• correct the mistakes essay 1
  
• plan essay 2 + start writing

• Words in Progress exc 29
  

 

• 
  

Mon 9/12

Bring a copy of essay 1 to class (typed + printed

 

Common mistakes in essay writing

Common mistakes in essay writing

Content  

• no thesis statement,  
  
• unclear structure/ arguments,  
  
• new arguments in conclusion 
  
• no point to ponder

You should be able to highlight your thesis statement and arguments in the text!!

Common mistakes in essay writing

Stylistic:

• informal language: kids, stuff 
  
• contracted forms: don’t – do not 
  
• ‘I’-constructions: I think this is wrong ->  
  

    This is wrong 

• ‘you’-constructions: If you make something illegal -> 
  

    If something is made illegal 

Common mistakes in essay writing

Spelling

• to / too: it will be too late - others may be hurt too 
  

go to the cinema - to be clear 

• of / off: switch something off – fall off  
  

    of course – plenty of time 

• there / their: there is much violence there (location) 
  

    they mind their own business (possessive) 

Common mistakes in essay writing

Grammar

• verb tenses (e.g. present simple vs. continuous),
• conditionals: if there would be a solution
• word order,
  
• incorrect or unclear references: these treatments lets 

• passives which aren't passives 
  
• amount vs. number

Common mistakes in essay writing

Linking words:

• But, And, So, Because 
  

Don’t use these at the start of your sentences. Instead use cohesive devices from your reader:  However, Moreover, Therefore,  
At last, -> Finally, 
At first, -> First of all, / Firstly, / In the first place, 

Common mistakes in essay writing

Punctuation

Please remember to start your sentences with a capital letter and end them with a full stop, question mark or exclamation mark. 

Linking words need special punctuation, e.g.:

Moreover, ...

This happens, for example, when people forget to...

Common mistakes in essay writing

Other

• no (original) title
  
• number of words (include a word count!),
  
• number of paragraphs

Can you spot the mistake(s)?

Please rewrite the sentences.

Essay 1

Answer key

Next class:

• Plan essay 2* + start writing
  
• WiP 29
  

Essay 2* to be handed in 

Monday 9/12 (typed + printed)

Tue 14 September

• check homework: exc 11, 14, 15, 23 
• speaking: exc 25
• TB 1.2 exc 11, 14, 15, 23

Good to see you, V5!

Mon 2/12 - Fri 6/12

Study objectives:

I can 

• identify and correct mistakes commonly made in essay writing
  
• plan and write an argumentative essay
  
• use exam vocabulary in context

 

This week's work

In class (1): 

• common mistakes in essay writing 
• correct the mistakes essay 1
  
• plan essay 2 + start writing

• Words in Progress exc 29
  

 

• 
  

Mon 9/12

Bring a copy of essay 1 to class (typed + printed

 

Lesson 2

Words in Progress exc 28 (key)

1. bills

2. 10 Downing Street

3. Liberal Democrats

4. Commonwealth

5. implemented

6. budget

7. domestic

8. Home Office

9. constituents

10. suppress

11. abdicated

12. administration

13. Senate

14. dissolve

15. eligible

16. House of Commons

17. MPs

18. Speaker

19. totalitarian

20. canvassing

Words in Progress exc 29  (vocab)

constituency

implementation

anthem

to renounce

common law

turnout

general

Labour

alderman

decree

to succeed

ro reign

policy

majority

monarchy

subjects

to vote

Act

moment

H o Commons

kiesdistrict

uitvoering

(volks)lied

afstand doen van

gemeen recht

opkomst

algemeen

Arbeid

wethouder

decreet, besluit

opvolgen

regeren

beleid

meerderheid

monarchie

onderdanen

stemmen

wetgevingsbesluit

belang

Tweede kamer

St Nicholas 

Sinterklaas

-1-

Take a trip down memory lane. How did you and your family celebrate St Nicholas Day when you were very young? Did Saint Nicholas pay a visit? What presents did you get? Were you nervous?

-2-

How old were you when you first realized Saint Nicholas was not real? How did you find out? What were your feelings at the time?

-3-

How would you describe our St Nicholas festivities to a foreigner? 

Part 1: Speaking 

Look, there is the steamer

from far a-way lands.

It brings us St. Nicholas,

he's waving his _____(1)_____

His ___(2)___ is a-prancing

on deck, up and down,

The banners are waving

in village and ____(3)____

Part 2A: Complete the lyrics

His helper is laughing

and tells everyone,

"The good kids get candy,

the bad ones get ___(4)___!"

Oh dearest Saint Nicholas,

if Pete and you would,

Please visit our ___(5)___ for

we all have been ___(6)___.

A. Dutch title?

Look, there is the steamer

from far a-way lands.

It brings us St. Nicholas,

he's waving his (1) hands

His (2) horse is a-prancing

on deck, up and down,

The banners are waving

in village and (3) town

Part 2A: Complete the lyrics (key)

His helper is laughing

and tells everyone,

"The good kids get candy,

the bad ones get (4) none !"

Oh dearest Saint Nicholas,

if Pete and you would,

Please visit our (5) house for

we all have been (6) good.

A. Zie ginds komt de stoomboot

Someone's coming, children,

Someone's knocking, children,

Someone's tapping at the window frame.

It's a __(1)___, I guess,

Who is wandering, I guess,

I shall check and ask him for his __(2)__ 

Part 2B: Complete the lyrics

 Chorus:

Saint Nicholas, Saint Nicholas, 

Will you please make a stop at our door, 

And throw in some candy, 

All around the __(3)___.

B. Dutch title?

Someone's coming, children,

Someone's knocking, children,

Someone's tapping at the window frame.

It's a (1) stranger, I guess,

Who is wandering, I guess,

I shall check and ask him for his (2) name. 

Part 2B: Complete the lyrics (key)

 Chorus:

Saint Nicholas, Saint Nicholas, 

Will you please make a stop at our door, 

And throw in some candy, 

All around the (3) floor.

B: Hoor wie klopt daar kinderen

next class: Monday 9/12

Finish essay 2 

+ bring typed out & printed copy to class

NB: 

Without a copy of your essay you will be unable to participate in this class!!