V3a writing feedback

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• Leerjaar 3

V3a writing feedback

Big mistakes

Small mistakes 

and everything in between

New years resolutions

I read all your little texts. 

Chosen a few examples of mistakes I saw

(all anonymous)

What is the mistake?

How would you correct the mistake?

I work every Saturday, so I cannot do my homework than.

1. Saturday - saturday
2. cannot - can not
3. than - then
4. geen fouten

I am looking every day on Pinterest.

1. I am looking on Pinterest every day.
2. I look every day on Pinterest.
3. I look on Pinterest every day.
4. geen fouten

Also cause I love healthy food. It tastes really good.

1. cause - because
2. good - well
3. tastes - is tasting
4. geen fouten

How would you correct the following sentences?

I hope I can do 3 times fitness in a week.

That’s why from now on I read 30 minutes before sleep.

Last year I ended in December eating a lot of sweat and unhealthy food.

I also want to pay more attention in the lessons and better keep track of my homework.

I know that’s kinda childish so after this lockdown I want to sport at least twice a week.

If I would start earlier with learning for my test, I would maybe get better notes.

Voorbeeld: 

This year I want to eat more healthier. Last year I ate a lot of chocolate and fast food. I also drunk a lot of drinks like fanta and ice tea. I want to change it this year. I only want to drink healty drinks, like water of vitamine water and eat healthy food. I also want to spend more time on my homework and learning. Every time when I came home from school this year, and I planned that im going to study or do some homework, I say to myself: ahh skip it I’ll do it tomorrow. Then I start saying that every day to myself and when I have less time to study I think by myself, Sh*t why am I so stupid i need to learn earlier. So that’s a big thing I want to change next year. I think those two are the only one I need to change next year. I hope 2021 will be so much better than 2020!

 

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i -> always I

This year I want to eat more healthier.

I also drunk a lot of drinks like fanta and ice tea.

Every time when I came home from school this year, and I planned that im going to study or do some homework, I say to myself: ahh skip it I’ll do it tomorrow.

Every time when I came home from school this year, I had planned to study or do some homework, but I said to myself: "ahh skip it, I’ll do it tomorrow."

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