Thesis statement and PEEL paragraphs

• Engels
• Middelbare school
• vwo
• Leerjaar 4

Today's goals:

- Give peer feedback on thesis statements 

- Learn PEEL structure of paragraphs 

- Write your own PEEL paragraph (pro) and hand-in on itslearning 

Where does your thesis statement appear in your essay?

1. First sentence of conclusion
2. Last sentence of introduction
3. First sentence of second paragraph
4. In your title

Thesis statement formula:

Claim (your position) + reason (evidence) = thesis statement 

Strong thesis statement:

Claim (your position) + reasons (evidence) x 3 = strong thesis statement!

3 reasons = topics for your 3 main body paragraphs in essay

Example: Smoking

Smoking should be banned in public places because second-hand smoke can cause serious health issues for other people, smoking can often result in a lot of litter on the floor and smoking in public places can also discourage young families from using certain facilities. 

Peer feedback - 5 mins

- Go to itslearning and give feedback for two students:

* Do they have a strong thesis statements (with 3 reasons)?

* What is good about their thesis statements?

* What can be improved? 

How to structure your body paragraphs using the PEEL method? 

Point: start your sentence with a clear topic sentence that establishes what your paragraph is about. 

Evidence/ Example: here you should use a piece of evidence that helps to reaffirm your iniitial point and develop the argument. 

Explain: next you need to explain exactly how your evidence supports your point. 

Link: you need to link the point you have just made back to your thesis or the following paragraph using a linking word

From this we can conclude that animals must be freed from zoos now, so that this terrible suffering and mental torture ends for good. 

For example, wild animals can develop the so-called "zoochosis" syndrome while they are in captivity. Animals that suffer from this condition start acting nervously, repeating various actions, such as moving back and forth for no apparent reason at all, etc.

First of all, removing wild animals from their natural habitats is both unethical and immoral.

POINT 

EVIDENCE / EXAMPLE 

EXPLANATION

LINK

Conditions such as this clearly demonstrate that wild animals belong in the wilderness; not in restrictive, prison-like enclosures. 

To do: 

* Write at least one paragraph using the PEEL structure 

* Use your thesis statements from last week to base your paragraph on 

* Hand-in paragraph on itslearning by the end of the lesson 

* Vocab assignment (DL Friday) 

Infants should not be given iPads, because studies show children under two can face developmental delays if they are exposed to too much screen time. A recent pediatric study showed that infants who are exposed to too much screen time may experience delays in speech development. The reason infants are facing these delays is because screen time is replacing other key developmental activities. The evidence suggests that infants who have a lot of screen time experience negative consequences in their speech development, and therefore they should not be exposed to iPads at such a young age. 

Discuss in groups the following body paragraph and determine the four elements of the PEEL method.