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What do you think this could be?

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The eye of a fly : )

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Today
  • Mvr Stek and baby Marie 
  • Essay Feedback - Toppers!
  • Quick homework check (Page 36 and 37 exercises 5 and 6 needed to be finished before today's lesson)
  • Grammar Future tenses - if time!

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     This is Marie Laura, born on the 8th of January. 

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Read your Feedback
Things that were done well:
Content was relevant
Good Layout
Good use of discourse markers: Firstly, Secondly, Finally
Good use of topic sentences to introduce your paragraphs (hardly anyone mistakenly used sub-headings or letter conventions)

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Tip: 
Always, always, always,
write a plan.

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common spelling errors
alot = a lot (actually, rather too informal, try and use many, numerous, several)
Wich =  which
dieing = dying
realy = really
endangerd = endangered
Common error: go/goes extinct  > becomes extinct 

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Remember to use good topic sentences to introduce your ideas/paragraphs.....
To start off with, I'm going to talk about bad things about not looking after animals and insects.
Firstly, some reasons to ensure that animals are protected are ............

I am going to write my essay on animals in danger. i have quite some ideas and want to tell them here.
It is very important for us to spend time, money and energy on the protection of animals as .....


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Correct use of common linking words
and
So next time you think it might be good not to spend tax payers money on preserving animals, think about all the advantages  and, the great benefit animals provide us with. Remember DON'T use a comma with and ....

So next time you think it might be good not to spend tax payers money on preserving animals, think about all the advantages and the great benefit animals provide us with.

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No comma here
Correct use of common linking words
but
There is no doubt that protecting endangered animals is very costly. But are they worth it? 

There is no doubt that protecting endangered animals is very costly, but are they worth it? 

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use "but" to join two ideas together by placing a comma before "but."
common error: a weak conclusion
Your last paragraph needs to be a conclusion. 
  • Always sum up what has already been said in your main paragraph.
  • Never introduce a new topic.
  • Start the paragraph with:To conclude, .... / To sum up, .... / In conclusion, ...../ All in all, ......
  • Try to link the last sentence in your conclusion back to something you have said in your introduction.   
  • REMEMBER TO SAY WHETHER YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

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Another common error: Too informal 
Try not to use too many shortened forms.
Do not use too many personal pronouns (I, she, he, it, you)
Use correct vocabulary for a semi-formal essay - 
a lot /many, numerous
gotta / got to
gonna / going to

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Remember: a catchy title
Government spending on animal protection: good or bad?
Endangered species, do they deserve our money?

Last but not least..... (not essential, but helps the reader know what your essay is about!

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Final tip....
Use the writing file in the back to Gold Experience, it is really helpful for the layout, tips and especially "Useful Language" for the essay task. 

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MORE PRACTICE......
WHY PRACTICE FOR THE ESSAY?
The essay (Part one) counts as the same number of points as the writing task in Part two but it is a mandatory task so we know that there is definitely going to be an essay in the writing exam. It is a sure way of getting good points if you have had lots of essay practice and looked at frequent topics that come up. 

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Today's lesson!
Quick Homework check
(Job: see Google Classroom)

Page 38 - Future tense
New LessonUp

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