H5 Week 9

• Engels
• Middelbare school
• havo
• Leerjaar 5

Rewrite this incorrect sentence: ''My brother is an excellent, he often spends hours on end on a specific game, he gets totally lost on it.''

Rewrite this incorrect sentence: '' The approach from the officers in the USA is also a very hard way to punish someone, the officers use a lot of violence to the criminals and have no mercy for them.''

Possible answers

• 1.  My brother is an excellent gamer. He often spends hours on end playing a specific game and gets totally lost in it.​
  
• 1. My brother, who is an excellent gamer, often spends hours on end playing a specific game. He gets totally lost in it.​
• 2. The officer's approach in the USA is also a very harsh way to punish someone. The officers use a lot of violence on the criminals and have no mercy for them.​
  
• 2. Officers in the USA also punish prisoners harshly. They use violence on the criminals and seem to have no mercy for them.​
• What is the problem in both of these examples? 

The comma splice

• When two complete sentences are smushed together into one​. The comma replaces the period​ Example: I completed my essay, I have not submitted it yet.​
• How can you fix it? ​ Use a period instead of a comma​. Use a linking word: and, but, so, because . Example: I completed my essay, but I have not submitted it yet.​
• Tip: Work on linking words

What are linking words?

1. Words that connect sentences.
2. Words that make sentences easier to read
3. Words that are extra
4. Fun words

Which linking word means "echter"?

1. Therefore
2. Because
3. However
4. Moreover

Linking word to show: ORDER

1. Especially
2. Furthermore
3. While
4. Subsequently

Linking word to show: CONTRAST

1. However
2. Besides
3. Following
4. Without a doubt

It is often said that school shoooters are out for revenge, 1._________ of having being bullied by their classmates. 2.________, in the case Brandy Bates, the problems seem to have had their basis in the home situation.

1. 1. since; 2. For example
2. 1. as a result; 2. However,
3. 1. for example; 2. Since
4. 1. also; 2. Also

Reports show that she lost both her parents within a short period of time. 3.______, no other relatives were able to help her. 4. _______, Brandy can be regarded as a very lonely and troubled girl indeed.

1. 3. Also; 4. In short
2. 3. For example; 4. Also
3. 3. So; 4. For example
4. 3. In short; 4. For example

5._______, she seemed to lack friends. 6._______, she dropped out of school for behavioural reasons.

1. 5. So; 6. Also
2. 5. In conclusion; 6. Moreover
3. 5. Furthermore; 6. Subsequently
4. 5. Since; 6. Also

7._______, she had her cute puppy dog and, 8.________, was not totally alone in the world.

1. 7. For example; 8. Since
2. 7. Therefore; 8. Nevertheless
3. 7. Since; 8. For example
4. 7. Nevertheless; 8. Therefore

So, 9.________, it is not always possible to pinpoint the main reasons for some youngg people to destroy their lives as well as the lives of others.

1. 9. In conclusion
2. 9. Moreover
3. 9. Subsequently
4. 9. So

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