FL2 essay lesson 5 peer feedback - phones!

• Cambridge
• Middelbare school
• vwo
• Leerjaar 2

Peer Feedback - essay p159

Phone on table, facing down. 

Inhaal?

At the end of the lesson, you know:

- what to check your own essay on

- how to give feedback

- what to check someone else's essay on

Peer Feedback - essay p159

How:   

- lesson start (5 mins)  

- Q Lessonup+instr check own essay (10 mins)

- watch videos about feedback (10mins)

- answer Qs in lessonup about the videos (10 mins)

- instructions teacher assessment&peer feedback essay (10m)

- give eachother feedback on essay (10mins)

- eval lesson (5)

What should you check
your own essay for?

Check in own essay:

- Have I answered the question?

- Did I add enough info (3rd point)?

- Style

- Linking words

- Vocab: synonyms, better words

- Grammar: mistakes, more complex?

- Spelling

Assignment

Watch the 3 short videos about peer feedback. There will be Lessonup Questions afterwards.

True or False: giving feedback teaches the giver of the feedback more than the writer of the essay

1. True
2. False

Which is a lower order issue you can give feedback on when reading someone else's essay?

1. Logic
2. Communicative achievement (Is the message effective?)
3. Grammar
4. Organisation

Which is NOT a rule for giving feedback?

1. Try to dig deep: find out what the writer wanted to say
2. Write the correct version of the mistake down
3. explain your feedback
4. Be considarate and respectful

True or false: "My essay is about...." is a good start for an intro

1. True
2. False

Which is not a focus on what you will be assessed on?

1. Content
2. Validity
3. Organisation
4. Language

Assessment - more next lesson

Content

Communicative achievement

Organisation

Language

Not: Validity (is what you say correct)

Checklist peer feedback writing part1

(based on Cambridge marking guides- see p 194 Gold First)

- Does it read easily? (communicative achievement)

- Is all info from assignment there? (content)

- Is all content relevant? (no unnecessary extra's) (content)

- Does the text have proper paragraphs? (organisation)

- Does the text use linking words? (see p 198 Gold First)(organisation)

- Are the ideas put in writing structurally? (niet van de hak op de tak)(organisation)

Checklist peer feedback writing part2

checklist language part

- check grammar

- can more difficult grammar structures be used?

- check use of words 

- can more bueautiful words be used, can Synonyms be used?

- check spelling

- check interpunction

- check do's and don'ts in TB (essay p180/181)

Now

-swap your essay with a peer and give feedback

- talk about the feedback

- improve your essay

Peer Feedback 

At the end of the lesson, you know:

- what to check your own essay on

- how to give feedback

- what to check someone else's essay on

On a scale of 1 to a 100, how well do you feel this lesson has helped you learn about essay writing?

-2100

Extra

Sample assessment

Review writing assignment

Let's look at some examples of this essay and how these were graded. 

Review writing assignment

Now review your own essay by looking at the criteria.

Look at...

content: Do you have sufficient arguments? Did you add your own idea? 

communicative achievement: Is your essay outline correct (intro, paragraphs, conclusion)? Did you use formal language? 

organisation: Does your essay have a logical order? Did you make use of formal linking words? 

language: Can you spot any language errors yourself? (this is the most difficult)