4. Feedback and revising written work

Week 4: (Formal) writing

Feedback and revising written work

23-24 Year 1 P1W2L3 - feedback and writing

What do we cover today?

• Looking back 
• Lesson objectives                     
• Feedback
• Revise your written introduction

                         

Looking back

What can you remember from our previous lesson?
(what did you do?/ learn?)
- answer in English please -

Lesson objectives

At the end of this lesson you...

... know what feedback is and why it's important;
... know how to give feedback;
... have revised your written introduction.

nouns / verbs / adverbs / adjectives

We listened to the horrible song.

Which word does the word 'horrible' refer to?

Drag the arrow to your answer.

We listened to the horrible song.

Something went horribly wrong.

Which word does the word 'horribly' refer to?

Drag the arrow to your answer.

Something went horribly wrong.

Beyonce sings fantastically.

Which word does the word 'fantastically' refer to?

Drag the arrow to your answer.

Beyonce sings fantastically.

I have a fantastic taste in music. 

Which word does the word 'fantastic' refer to?

Drag the arrow to your answer.

I have a fantastic taste in music.

Feedback

When working together you also have to give feedback. This can be difficult. But receiving feedback can be even harder. Why?

Giving Feedback

How to do it and when is it effective?

What can you give feedback on?

Content

Grammar

Spelling

Sentence structure

Amount

Accuracy

Fluency

Form

Neatness

Effectiveness 

Types of feedback: 

"It's not good and it looks ugly."

Types of feedback: 

"It's not good and it looks ugly"

"I think this a good first draft. It does need some work before you hand it in. For example, you made some spelling errors such as "there" instead of "their". Also, don't forget the capital I when you are talking about yourself. It looks to me like you have really thought of what you wanted the reader to know in this assignment, so I am confident you will be able to write an interesting final version."  

Give feedback on this poster. Try to use the feedback sandwich.

Receiving feedback

• Listen
• Take notes
• Ask questions

Now it is your turn...

Give each other feedback on the introductions written in the previous lesson. 

Feedback Giver: Read the introduction of your fellow student. Take notes on what you want to say.  Give feedback verbally, in English. Try to use the feedback sandwich.

Feedback Receiver: Listen, take notes and ask questions.

Revise your work

1. Revise your written introduction based on the feedback you've received. 
2. Once you're done, reread your final work. 

Done? 

Reading skills

Read this article https://www.bbc.com/news/business-62466147

What is the article about?

What is your opinion on this?

Find 10 words you are not familiar with, create an Excel sheet called "English personal vocabulary list year 1", look up the definitions on the Cambridge dictionary website.

At the end of this lesson you:

At the end of this lesson you:

• know what feedback is and why it's important;
• know how to give feedback;
• have revised your written introduction;
• have handed in your assignment.