Feedback lesson Dear Esther V3D

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• Middelbare school
• havo, vwo
• Leerjaar 3

Feedback lesson dear Esther, V3D 

Agenda

1. Flashback last lesson
2. Feedback practice letters
3. Time to improve letter
4. Time to ask questions

Writing assignment 

You are going to write some professional advice for a teen with a question or problem regarding sex and/or sexuality. You will write on behalf of a sexologist named Esther who works for a teen magazine. Readers of this magazine send in their questions monthly. As an employee of this magazine, you are responsible for selecting a question to which you will give a friendly, helpful, and professional reply.

Requirements:

- Use biology vocabulary to give good advice, based on knowledge gained during sexual education.

- The advice is well structured and easy to understand, use polite language with a proper beginning and end.

- Show respect and compassion

- Use 150-200 words

- Do not use any resources other than a Dutch-English dictionary

Good points in general

- use of structure in the text:
opening - middle part - closing part

- Compassion is shown:
" I understand ... " , It's a pity" , " Better try next time" 

-  Giving multiple type of advice

" You could use a tampon, or menstrual cup" . " Take it slow .... communicate beforehand'

Room for improvement in general

-Not explaining terms
" You could use the pill". 

Advice is (not) enough supported by argument

" use a cup for swimming " --> what, how, why? 

- The difference between solutions is not shown.
" What is the difference between a cup and tampon? "

- Mistakes in or not giving biologcally information.

" A tampon can be worn for over 12 hours"  

Tip

Write from a perspective to someone who does not know anything.

But do not forget the respect and compassion part

Example 1 

Dear girl,

u can use a tampon and if you find it scary don't do it. it is hard but it is your problem. You can search online for something maar IDK and why are you asking me IDK. Maybe you can do it with your mom. For the 1000 time it is your problem. 

Kind regards,

.....

Example 2 

Dear Anonymous girl,

Thank you for you’re question. I understand that it is very annoying that you can’t swim with your pad in. I think that swimming on your period is never nice. Fortunately, there are a few solutions to this problem. So, no worries I’m going to help you.

The first (and most used) solution is a tampon. A tampon is an item inserted into the vagina to collect the lost womb lining and blood. If you use a tampon you can swim without worries. You do need to keep in mind that you need to change it when necessary or after 8 hours.

Another solution is a menstruation cup. A menstruation cup is also an item inserted into the vagina to collect the lost womb lining and blood. You do need to make sure it’s in the right position, and keep in mind that it will be full after a while. When you make sure it sits right you can also swim with a menstruation cup without worries.

I hope that I answered your question, and this helped you. If you have any more questions, feel free to ask me.

Kind regards,

Ester.

Example 3

Dear anonymous girl,

Thank you for sending your question. I know being on your period really sucks. Especially the first few times. When you your period is not regularly, and you don’t know when to expect it. You can always discus this kind of things with a person that you trust, and you don’t have to be ashamed.

 A pool party is really fun, but of course less when you’re on your period. The best product you can use is a tampon. This is an item that you insert in your vagina, it absorbs the lost womb lining and blood. This way you can still enjoy the party while you are menstruating.

You can buy these tampons in your local pharmacies and also even in some supermarkets. Do not be scared to discuss these things with your parents, they will understand! Again, thank you for your questions.

Kind regards,

Esther

Example 4

Dear anonymous boy.

Thanks for your question. I get this question quite often and I understand why you would ask this. I believe that it doesn’t really matter what the size of your penis is. It really depends on the preferences of your girlfriend or the person you are with. Some people like it when the penis has a bigger size and for some people it is better that the penis is a little bit smaller. Every penis is a different size and a different shape. An erection is caused when a man gets aroused then the erectile tissue fills up with blood which causes the penis to get stiff. Usually, the penis grows bigger when it is in erection but for some this is not the case, and it stays the same size when it is flaccid. So don’t worry about how big your penis is.

Kind regards,

Esther.

Analyse your own product

1. Look at the feedback and the rubric. Write down what is good and what can be improved.
   
   
2. Discuss your letter with your neighbour and compare your letter who's is better and write down why.
   
   
3. Type an improved letter on your laptop

Questions about the Dear Esther writing test?

I feel confident that I can succeed the writing test.

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What to bring to the test

• Charged laptop
• Wordbook NL - Eng --> Tip! Mediatheek