FCE Test Week 2: Essay Feedback

• Engels
• Middelbare school
• vwo
• Leerjaar 2

Read your Feedback

Things that were well done:

Content was relevant

Good Layout

Good use of topic sentences to introduce your paragrphs (hardly anyone mistakenly used sub-headings)

Tips: 

Self schooled,  This is not the same as homeschooled.  

common spelling errors

alot = a lot

Wich =  which

teached  = taught

realy = really

verry = very

Remember to use good topic sentences to introduce your ideas/paragraphs.....

To start off with, I'm going to talk about bad things about not sending your child to school.

Firstly, some ways to make homeschooling more sociable for a child could be to ............

I am going to write my essay on homeschooling. i have quite some ideas and want to tell them here.

Correct use of common linking words

and

So next time you think it might be good not to have to go to school, think about all the advantages  and, the great social side of going to school. Remember DON'T use a comma with and ....

So next time you think it might be good not to have to go to school, think about all the advantages and the great social side of going to school. 

No comma here

Correct use of common linking words

but

A big disadvantage is that schools will not  buy books for you. But are those books the right books? 

A big disadvantage is that schools will not buy books for you, but are those books the right books? 

use "but" to join two ideas together by placing a comma before "but."

common error: a weak conclusion

Your last paragraph needs to be a conclusion. 

• Always sum up what has already been said in your main paragraph.
• Never introduce a new topic.
• Start the paragraph with:To conclude, .... / To sum up, .... / In conclusion, ...../ All in all, ......
• Try to link the last sentence in your conclusion back to something you have said in your introduction.   
• REMEMBER TO SAY WHETHER YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.

Another common error: Too informal 

Try not to use too many shortened forms.

Do not use too many personal pronouns (I, she, he, it, you)

Use correct vocabulary for a semi-formal essay - 

Kids   /children 

gotta / got to

gonna / going to

Remember: a catchy title

Homeschooling: good or bad?

Homeschooling and its consequences.

Last but not least.....

Final tip....

Use the writing file in the back to Gold Experience, it is really helpful for the layout, tips and especially "Useful Language" for the essay task. 

MORE PRACTICE......

WHY PRACTICE FOR THE ESSAY?

The essay (Part one) counts as the same number of points as the writing task in Part two but it is a mandatory task so we know that there is definitely going to be an essay in the writing exam. It is a sure way of getting good points if you have had lots of essay practice and looked at frequent topics that come up. 

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