"It's not good and it looks ugly"
"I think this a good first draft. It does need some work before you hand it in. For example, you made some spelling errors such as "there" instead of "their". Also, don't forget the capital I when you are talking about yourself. It looks to me like you have really thought of what you wanted the reader to know in this assignment, so I am confident you will be able to write an interesting final version."
Lesson duration is: 60 min
