Week 23 Essay Writing Lessons: Peer feedback on outline second essay

• Engels
• Middelbare school
• vwo
• Leerjaar 5

Today's plan

1) At the end of this class, you will have provided each other with peer feedback on the outlines for practice essay 2 on BNW and THT

Flashback

Which paragraph should contain the most important argument of your essay?

Guidelines arguments 

- Structure your arguments in a way that the final argument is the most important. Make sure that the two previous arguments lead up to this final argument. 

- Do your arguments provide an answer to your question? If not, you may have to be more specific, cut out the details and be more focussed. 

What are you writing about in your essay for the question:
How is education considered a means of manipulation in BNW and THT?

The plan for this week

Monday: outline ready so that classmates can provide feedback. 

Tuesday: no class

Thursday: final changes on your essay

Friday : hand in for teacher feedback 

If you want to check your essay question for the pto 4, I will provide you with feedback. You can do this up until the test. 

Practice Essay 2

Essay question: 

How is education considered a means of manipulation in Brave New World and The Handmaid's Tale? 

 peer feedback duos: 

1. Soemaya - Sandy                  8. Sultan - Melyat

2.Ebrar - Yagmur                       9. Wiktoria - Naoual 

3.Bin - Tasnime                         10. Safae - Mariam

4.Jianhao - Asma                    11. Selin - Joudi 

5. Dewi - Basem                        

6.  Elif - Zahrah                                   

7.  Riem-  Nayab                                        

Checklist

- Check each other's arguments. 

- Use the essay outline to guide you and keep in mind that the arguments should give an answer to the question. Are the 3 arguments clear and focussed enough for an essay of 600-800 words? Give 3 positive comments and 2 possible improvements. I expect you to help eachother and exchange thoughts. 

What was your feedback for your peer?

A few things to note....

- One could say OR the book explains OR Lenina is (just state it as a fact, we know that YOU are writing it.)

- The Brave New World? What is the planet called?

- The World State? Who are the ones in charge?

- omit contractions!

- Use quotations! 

- avoid using But at the beginning of a sentence. 

Finishing outline/ writing the essay

- Start writing the essay by using the outline you have made. The outline has to be right  to write the essay. 

- Start with the introduction, you do not need to have the full intro done in order to write the body paragraphs. 

- Make sure to mention what you will do in the essay + the essay question in the intro. Use linking words to link the paragraphs. 

The plan for this week

Monday: outline ready so that classmates can provide feedback. 

Tuesday: no class

Thursday: final changes on your essay

Friday : hand in for teacher feedback 

If you want to check your essay question for the pto 4, I will provide you with feedback. You can do this up until the test. 

Mention a) 1 thing you take away from this lesson AND b) 1 thing you would like to do more in English class OR do not understand.